Everyone has a person that they love. The person can be their father, mother, sister, brother and everyone whose close with them. I also have people that I love. They really means for me. They will beside me someday when I feel down. I do not know what happen with myself if someone whom I love leave me later.
One of them is my mother. She is someone who I really love in this world. She is a super woman. She is the best gift that God was gave to me. How lucky I am to have a great mother like her. She gave birth 3 children. She fight between alive and die at that time. She takes care of her children until now.
She is beautiful. She has a white skin. She is tall. She has a curly black hair. She has a beautiful dimple. She has a pointed nose. She wears veil when she goes outside.
She is a single parent now. My father passed away 2 years ago. She takes care of her children by herself now. She earns our life with open the grocery store. It is very foolish if I disappointed her. I am very close with her now because I always share everything. I also sleep with her. Before I sleep, I talk to her about what happened in that day.
Loving people with all of your heart. Do not make them disappointed. If you care with all of the people, many people will love you. Do not ever do things that they do not like. Be a good person.
They will beside me someday when I feel down = They will beside me when I feel down
BalasHapusits better if you put some photos in your essay.
BalasHapuskeep writing Min :)
good writing Jasmine !!!!
BalasHapusBut use the alignment to make your writing neater.
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in the first paragraph, you should write "They really mean for me" or to be better if you wrote "They really have a meaningful for me". But don't use "s" in word "means"
BalasHapusgood writing mbak :D
BalasHapusI think you should put your mother's photos :)
that too short, mbak...........
BalasHapusplease check your grammar and add some of supporting sentences....
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good essay! keep struggling to make your lovely person be proud of you!
BalasHapusi like this essay, and i do agree with your essay..i love my mother too.
BalasHapuswhat do you mean with them in "One of them is my mother"
BalasHapusyou say that "everyone has a person that they love". a person = them??
They will beside me someday when I feel down, maybe you meant, They will beside me anytime when I feel down.
BalasHapusit was too short !!
BalasHapusgood essay......mbak,,,
BalasHapusi suggest you to add photo in your essay mbk...
andi think you have to explain more than it,,,,